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sueb
sueb
Mar 12, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Expectant

Handcuffed

Bound

to a chair

Blindfold

tethered

wet down there

Scared

excited

nipples bare

Arched

prepared

expectant air

Frustrated

unsated

not fair

Ahh, finally, he’s here

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

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Comments

William Saint George

William Saint George

12 years 4 months ago

...and I thought it was Esker

...and I thought it was Esker's. Good work creating the imagery with single words and short phrases.

I don't see the deliberate structure in this though, but it's lovely.

Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 4 months ago

Sue

Just a word then a thought and another word..
Well done, though I am not in favour of bondage,
whatever switches you on lol
Take care out there in that Emerald plain, Yours Ian.T, again.

S

scribbler

12 years 4 months ago

Hi Sue

Sorry to hear you've been ill but glad you're better. I expect the clipped form of this might well reflect a woman's thoughts in that situation. Only thing I'd think about changing is "sated" , I think perhaps satiated is what you intended............stan

weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 4 months ago

I've been avoiding this.

At first I thought it was an ironical comment about the bondage of a woman in labour, except "Blindfold" and "nipples bare" belied that. Bondage I have no problem with however there are over-tones of rape fantasy, which I find distasteful in the extreme.

A troublesome poem. I really don't know what to make of it.

sueb

sueb

12 years 4 months ago

Hi Jess I'm not into bondage

Hi Jess I'm not into bondage or anything like it had a conversation about 50 shades and this poem was written after it all the best x