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Wish You Enough
Saying good-bye to a friend
can sometimes seem unfair,
one tries to express things
showing they really care.
So I’m tackling this task
even though it’s quite rough,
I won’t say, “good-bye”
but, I wish you enough.
I wish you enough sunlight
to lessen your pain,
and to enjoy the sun’s grace
I wish you enough rain;
I wish you enough happiness
so you’ll enjoy every mile,
with just enough sadness
to appreciate a smile;
to satisfy your “wants”
I wish you enough “gain”,
and I wish you enough, “hellos”
for when “good-byes” just remain;
we make friends in a minute,
within an hour, know they’re true,
so, it only took me a day
to know, I’ll never forget you !
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 4 months ago
Should second stanza read
one tries to express things
that shows that one cares?
Otherwise nice thoughts especially
to satisfy your “wants”
I wish you enough “gain”,
docmaverick
12 years 4 months ago
Soo happy, frenchy....
...this caught your keen eye. You're correct, you know. About the 2nd stanza, but I wanted not to have care be a plural, nes 'pa? I DID try to "fix it", though; what say you, now?
Thanx, again;
doc.
Lenny of Cohen
12 years 4 months ago
Hauntingly
brilliant write.
Absorbing.
Namaste,
Lenny
docmaverick
12 years 4 months ago
I really appreciate you, l of c....
...for your generous remarks. Made my day, sir.
Sincerely,
than, for that;
doc