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Geremia
Geremia
Mar 24, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

ROSE

ROSE

The thorns pierce
The Rose
and it bleeds
betrayed
by its own nature

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Country/Region: USA

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Ian.T

Ian.T

12 years 3 months ago

Joe

I have written the piece as a Senyru, and it has come out good..
Your theme is excellent to perceive that the rose would pierce its own flesh, or betray its self with its own defence system, I will PM it to you as it looks like an intrusion on the stream, Yours Ian.T

loved

loved

12 years 3 months ago

a sad depiction of the beauty

a sad depiction of the beauty
of a rose
it's the only flower
which never dies
nor bleeds

but rends hearts
to bleed in love.

K

Kailashana2

12 years 3 months ago

The fragility of the rose

The fragility of the rose rests in its thorns. A universal theme, we each capture in our own way, in due time.

Nice, Joe.

~A

K

Kailashana2

12 years 3 months ago

Yup, dear Joe!

Yup, dear Joe!

I'm reminded of *thorns have roses*. Some days--it's just like that. :-)

Love.

Rula

Rula

12 years 3 months ago

hi joe

I know what is this about but can't see much logic in your imagery.
May be i'm missing something

loved

loved

12 years 3 months ago

this is an universal law

this is an universal law

birth, life and death
applies to lilies equally….
but the only flower that survives
in pages of history,
on the shelves of time
in libraries
is a lovely rose only

a rose,
from buttons on coats,
to biers
it’s the most sought out flower…
hence give due merit to me,
there is yet to be a rose born
like Lovedly