Josephus

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The Mendicant

Fastidious

Starched shirt paisley tie
Both frayed
Worn with dignity

Suit shining witness
To countless years
Service

White silk handkerchief
Mottled as ancient cream

Shoes cracked
Polished to a glow

Meticulous

He is seminal
To the community

A profession
Of great regard
And universal need

His chambers
City Hall square

The town mendicant
Providing
Chance for giving
And receiving

Gratitude

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Canada, CAN

Favorite Poets: The next one I read. I thoroughly enjoy reading the works of amateur poets. Neruda is my hero but absolutely no one has a better way with words than Shakespeare.

Comments

Josephus

12 years 3 months ago

observation

As seen in passing through a small town

loved

12 years 3 months ago

perceptive you are

the first quality needed
of a poet
to knead poetry of some lovely standard
and you are young
Neopoet

Josephus

12 years 3 months ago

Thank you

Thank you for your encouragement

loved

12 years 3 months ago

I see...

that you not only feel, but see too! Nice job, good work! ~ Gee

Josephus

12 years 3 months ago

Thanks for reading and taking

Thanks for reading and taking an interest in my work.

Joe

Frenchf

12 years 3 months ago

This reminded me of Sweeney Todd

And the barbers. especially the Italian Barber

Josephus

12 years 3 months ago

I must confess, I know

I must confess, I know nothing of Sweeny Todd, but I'm grateful that you found the poem worthy of comment. Thanks and best regards,

Joe

Seren

12 years 3 months ago

Dear Joe

The imagery is fantastic I loved where you took me,

Kudos

love JC x

Josephus

12 years 3 months ago

Thanks, Jayne. Its great to

Thanks, Jayne. Its great to hear you enjoy my work.

Fondly

Joe

Ian.T

12 years 3 months ago

If only all people could see while they are travelling around the byways of the world as you have done very well.
Ask people at work that have come in by car what they saw as they came to work, and watch the frown drive their memory to exhaustion as they say nothing out of the normal.
Maybe we should ask that lovely man to wave at them, Yours Ian.T