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Apr 03, 2013
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Goth Princess
Black hair parted to an edged obsessive glow
Gothic arch framing an alabaster face
mirrors her vulva captured in tight black pants
Sharp lines
severe
Tight breasts shark edged
Dog collar, Studded
Black, pervasive
Eyes, lips, nails
Standing, legs crossed.
Body shouting a defiant slouch.
A small woman on guard against an intrusive world.
eyes turned out in arresting poise
Waiting...
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Frenchf
12 years 3 months ago
Why a small woman?
I've seen some big goths
But yes.
well described.does the dress make it a defense against the world?
Josephus
12 years 3 months ago
Thanks for your thoughts on
Thanks for your thoughts on this, French. The muse behind this poem was a small woman I saw one day on a street corner as I was riding a bus. The moment passed quickly but the image stayed with me. The poem is my take on the tableau from her physical description to her imagined persona.
Thanks again,
Joe
Seren
12 years 3 months ago
Josephus
I have to agree with the above comments I really liked that it felt personal or intimate, I cant see anything that could be changed to improve the poem on a whole this is a really good piece
I look forward to reading more from you
sincerely Jayne-Chloe
Josephus
12 years 3 months ago
Thank you both, Beau and Jane
Thank you both, Beau and Jane-Chloe, for your kind reviews.
Joe