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Apr 05, 2013
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Reciprocation
I got up
out of bed
got dressed
fed the cats
and myself
turned on the tv
news and weather
looked outside
it was sunny
but cool on the windows
sat, smoked, thought
half a day gone
pointless but true
not all inspirationy
or exciting
but true nonetheless
my life this morning
in a piece for
your boredom relief tonight
a dull poem
for sure
but it took some of your time
away from
nothingness
creeping all over you
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Seren
12 years 3 months ago
Al,
I thoroughly enjoyed your dull day but as our friend Beau says that last stanza draws the poem to a perfect close, its a creepy thing to think of nothing, nothing ! crawling on you, I really loved it and sorry I cannot find anything to crit
love Jayne-Chloe x
Frenchf
12 years 3 months ago
Oh my my
The awfulness of that reality of nothing. Thank god for work.Loved this
weirdelf
12 years 3 months ago
This was my day exactly,
although tonight I spent a fair bit of time on Neopoet and wrote a bad poem.
Love this, everything that Beau said.
My epitaph will be
"I'm glad I didn't spend more time at the office"
Ian.T
12 years 3 months ago
Al
How can we crit Nothing, the end was good lol, Yours Ian.T