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Apr 30, 2013
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To Make it Brief
If you're an adult
or a child,
civilized or
living in the wild,
let mother nature
guide, nurture and lead,
then all you need
is to imitate
what she would
naturally
illustrate.
God has always
educated mothers
what they need
to educate.
About This Poem
Last Few Words:
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
12 years 2 months ago
Add a chorus...
and a couple of more verses and you would have a good conservationist rap! No joke, it reads well as a rap!
You might want to work on it a little more, but keep the same rhythm, I like it. ~ Geezer
Rula
12 years 2 months ago
hello Gee
Not so sure how to add that chorus, wish you've set an example but I am
so grateful that you've pointed out that it needed some verses to add. I think
it was so brief to convey my message.
Now, I am really satisfied with what I did. Hope you're too.
Thank you.
Rula
12 years 2 months ago
Dear Beau
I liked the idea of the audiance . I might consider it in one of
my coming writings yet I hadn't the intention to have any in this piece.
However, this doesn't say that I didn't highly appreciate your feedback.
Thanks for your thoughts.