Royyce Jeddi O'Zionn

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All that wishing,
Never doing.

All that frustration,
Keeps on brewing.

And the tea of laziness
Is never sipped.

~Is Inaction Too An Action?~

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I believe that even laziness involves some sort of action.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Comments

BettyBuff

12 years 1 month ago

Neat

Hi Royyce.

Love the line '...and the tea of laziness is never sipped'...fitted in well with the idea of frustration 'brewing'. Title is clever. Short but sweet. Namaste.

Ells

Royyce Jeddi O'Zionn

12 years 1 month ago

Thanks!

Hello Betty,thanks for reading,and for your comment too.
Glad you noticed the link between that line and the idea.

Ian.T

12 years 1 month ago

Jeddi

Now what do I do as I is all of those things,
or was this just a pointed poem lol,
Yours Sparrow

Royyce Jeddi O'Zionn

12 years 1 month ago

Ian

I'm not sure I get what you're saying.

Ian.T

12 years 1 month ago

Jeddi

If you was a true Jeddi you would have known what I was:-
I does all of these

All that wishing,
Never doing.
All that frustration,
Keeps on brewing.
And the tea of laziness
Is never sipped.

So is the last line my capture.

~Is Inaction Too An Action?~
Yours Sparrow..

wesley snow

12 years 1 month ago

Three months here

and this is the first time I saw your poetry. I MUST get out more often. Blame my duties.
I loved this little piece. You use a Rubik's cube of twisted phrases that turn in on each other. That is some of my favorite stuff.
I can't suggest anything to help. The poem is superb.

Royyce Jeddi O'Zionn

12 years 1 month ago

So glad for your comment;

So glad for your comment; "You use a Rubik's cube of twisted phrases that turn in on each other. That is some of my favorite stuff." :)