weirdelf

Jul 24, 2013 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

There is a monster in my house and I am helpless

Motley, furry,
sprawled across my bed.
Ten black eyes rise up
and stare inside my head.
Eighty razor claws,
five gaping jaws.
A heat seeking,
flesh eating
monster of chaos?
Yes,
kittens.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Comments

eightmenout

11 years 11 months ago

Welcome back

Glad to see you are writing again.

Scott

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

I like this! Smooth cadence

I like this! Smooth cadence and rhyme easy on the eyes and ears,,,,

Welcome home.

Joe

Geezer

11 years 11 months ago

I pictured...

spiders and assorted monsters! When I found it to be kittens, I was amused, and then thought about the kittens I have had. I can just see you mobbed by five kittens! Funny, to say the least! ~ Gee

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

thanks Joe and Gee

It was fun to write, inspired by the chilly way kittens stare at you, the mayhem they create in the house and several gashes incurred whilst playing with them.

Ian.T

11 years 11 months ago

Jess

A good fun write, good to see you here.
Hope we can get on with some serious stuff again ??
Maybe not, I forgot I is writing dark stuff of late and need a couple of fingers for Digit,
Yours Ian.T

lonlyhrtsclub13

11 years 11 months ago

who has much experience with kittens/cats, all you stated is true. They are like tiny asshole ninjas running through your house trying to trip you up, destroying things, shredding your hands, arms and feet on a whim...yet they are the best friends I ever had. They do stare very strangely at you when you pass by, gives you the creepy feeling you are being watched...good write :)

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

Ta Ian and Carrie

It's a start.

scribbler

11 years 11 months ago

Hi Jess

Well it could be worse , it could be other people's spoiled children lol............stan

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

Give me

a five mouthed, ten eyed, eighty clawed monster over spoiled rugrats any day!

loved

11 years 11 months ago

My Pal Ian said

you will soon take over
and improve Neo further
missed you so much
you just can't imagine ever
none to kick me inpoetic love as
you do forever

well come Jess

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

sounds ominous

thanks loved

loved

11 years 11 months ago

ominous thereby

implying???

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

I was referring to

"you will soon take over
and improve Neo further"
I am standing for re-election but not elected yet!

loved

11 years 11 months ago

and you

will be

Ian.T

11 years 11 months ago

Loved

Did you see what you said to Jess "that he would be loved "?? lol.
Have a great day young Bard, cant wait to see who is elected..
Yours Ian.T

Race_9togo

11 years 11 months ago

You made me smile

Good to see you, its been awhile.
I love the alien feel you give this, and the shortening lines to the final reveal.
But Jess...
...it could have been PUPPIES, man.

LOL

excellent

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

Good to see you too, man

No way! Puppies may be chaos monsters too, but not the talons and un-nerving stare.

ANC1996

11 years 11 months ago

Being cat obsessed, this made

Being cat obsessed, this made me smile so much. A real day brightener. I thought It was about spiders at first, kittens had me giggling like crazy. Sounds about like my cats (:

hugs,
Adrianna

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

Cat people of the world unite!

Have you noticed if you mention cats in chat most of the blokes, especially those from the southern states who have copped a bit of sun on the back of their necks, go feral and start chasing their tails?

lonlyhrtsclub13

11 years 11 months ago

i am convinced

i should have been the crazy cat lady...all though I am down to my last furbaby at the moment.

Rula

11 years 11 months ago

I'm not a big fan

of any of the pets but I like this piece.
You're coming with a good mood,hopefully :)

wesley snow

11 years 11 months ago

Cool.

There are few things more terrifying.

Esker

11 years 11 months ago

good solid poetry

Our Milo is a snob and rightly so.....
his pals of skunks and racoons
favour me and leave me alone
when I mistake him for their comradeship
with bad eyes at night to the dustbin...
they wadde off like him indifferent
neither hissing nor spraying me...

a good write bard! Thank You!

mand

11 years 11 months ago

Hi Weirdelf

I love the fun of this poem.

They really do sound like monsters - you have captured the essence of the wild side of cats. I love the way you have described them - and the contrast at the end.

Great fun! and it flowed soo well.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

Ta Wesley, Steven and Mand

Great to see you back, Mand. I'll check out your new work.

Rula

11 years 11 months ago

am I

Intentionally left!:)

weirdelf

11 years 11 months ago

No, it was my oversight

apologies, thanks and yes, coming from a good place.

wesley snow

11 years 11 months ago

Why do cats choose people?

We have a new stray that I have named Albatross because he's always hanging around my neck.

lonlyhrtsclub13

11 years 11 months ago

cats

Are strange little creatures. I taught my Samantha how to behave like a baby....she would even wrap around my neck. My mom would call her my fur collar. My Mustard...rest his soul...would sit near you.never on you...moody little creature....but they were my best friends