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Naked Emotion, Truth and Originality

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A Poetic Fib (Fibonacci Poetry)

I'm
not
goddess
Demeter
or Persephone
but I sow thoughts where summers tread
then the sunshine would bathe them warm to grow endlessly.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: An attempt in Jess's fibonacci form of poetry. Not sure that I've captured the right idea of "enthusiastic bewonderment" though, and wasn't brave enough to go beyond the 7 th line. I thought sonnets are easier to write LOL *Demeter (in Greek ancient Myth) is the goddess of the harvest, who presided over grains and the fertility of the earth **Persephone (in Greek Myth) is Demeter's daughter, the queen of the underworld and the goddess of spring. The reference is always the Wikipedia

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

weirdelf

weirdelf

11 years 10 months ago

Excellent attempt

I think the last word 'read' blows the sense of wonder though.
Perhaps instead of 'for a read' 'endlessly'?

Rula

Rula

11 years 10 months ago

jess

Thank you . I think I was ambitious to rhyme 'tread' with 'read' . Thanks for the suggestion.

BlueDemon77

BlueDemon77

11 years 10 months ago

Good Job Rula!

I appreciate the effort and the quality of your work in trying all these different styles.

Ron