The Evergreen (Tetractys)

I
shall live
for decades
until you know.
I'm the evergreen that you grew in you.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Rula

11 years 10 months ago

About the form

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cinquain

Ian.T

11 years 10 months ago

Rula

................................ I ...........................
..............................had .........................
...........................looked........................
....................up the form first................
..............before saying anything...........

It is hard to put on Neo as a triangle, I use the spaces and run the first one to the middle then the rest to follow if I need form, that didn't work so I used full stops to do it as here, I did one with a pic of Parliament Hill building in the States but it became history quickly as some works do.
Take care, just another form to play with, Yours Ian.T

Rula

11 years 10 months ago

Ian

you needn't do the form in triangle. Just follow the 1,2, 3,4, 10 syllables in five lines. Easy.
Why don't you give it a shot.
Thanks for dropping by.

Ian.T

11 years 10 months ago

OK young one

I will have a go at it, very similar to Fibs.
Will do it later when time permits,
Yours Ian.T

...................... Me.....................
....................Trying...................
..............Something new.........
...........That day will come.......

Yours, Sparrow.
PS:-Yenti is away from the comp, so I is here La La