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Victims of Twilight

I've researched, and I've written
about when, "twilight time" appears,

history proves it's different each night
and there's something about shadows, and mirrors.

But, I can tell you something
that narrows it down, even more,

just grab an odd numbered moonbeam,
and, you'll be gone before your feet hit the floor!

That's not to say it happens, everytime,
it depends greatly, on ebb and on flow;

but, catch that light splinter, at just the right moment,
and, when it happens...believe me, you'll know!

There's no other way to describe it,
than that, it involves a great deal of luck;

but, make sure you bring along your shadow, or else...
..in that world, you'll inevitably be stuck!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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docmaverick

docmaverick

14 years 6 months ago

Well, Jay-C...

..I believe that I enjoyed your critique, as a whole.....too! Lol! Seriously.....I've probably driven "twilight" into the ground, don'tcha think?
The same, back @ ya!
love,
doc.