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Sep 27, 2013
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Man, A King Of The Cats
A man who pissed you off so bold
Shopping is like sparkling gold
Glittering in the smile of a rose
When feelings of affection are revived.
I stay within financial means
But sometimes I get so steamed
Without retail therapy to tame my meanness
My submission is in jeopardy.
If I could turn back the hands of times
I may revise words that caused your demised
But then you'd still be the same old guy
I wish I could choke some sense into
A gentle lil pussy
Becomes a fierce cat
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
mand
11 years 9 months ago
Made me smile. He he This
Made me smile. He he This poem is very relatable and very cleverly written. Love the second stanza especially the last two lines.
Very well done! I like this poem a lot
Love Mand xxxxxx
Barbara Writes
11 years 9 months ago
Hehe thanks
Glad you like it
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
It's my job to fix the small errors
A man can pissed you off so bold [bad grammar maybe who instead of can]
That shopping is like sparkling gold
Glittering in the smile of a rose
When feelings of affection is revived. [grammar again are revived]
I stay within financial means
But sometimes I get so steamed
Without retail therapy to tame my meanness
My submission is in jeopardy.
If I could turn back the hands of times
I'd revised words that caused your demised [?]
[I would revise the words that caused your demise]
But then you'd still be the same old guy
I wish I could choke some sense into
A gentle lil pussy
Becomes a fierce cat
Now to the meaning of the poem. From your body of work I know you are in an abusive relationship, so who becomes the pussy and who the firece cat?
Barbara Writes
11 years 9 months ago
Lol
Pussies can become fierce cats when cornered if it sees no way out. Otherwise stay a pussy.
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
Good call!
Rawwwr grrl!
Barbara Writes
11 years 9 months ago
As for errors
A thorn in my flesh. I try though by revising several times before submitting.
lonlyhrtsclub13
11 years 9 months ago
very nice
I like the meaning and the comparison of a,woman scorned or fed up to a cat...docile until pushed to the limits...than look out! Great write
Barbara Writes
11 years 9 months ago
Glad you like it Carrie
I'm glad the cats description worked.