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Oct 29, 2013
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Lucky Strikes
and coca cola
a screen erupts in light
phantasms
the lamps blaze
through the trick
teeth
like the magic of life
swooning on popcorn
and fresh love
the machine alphabets
speakers and thighs
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
brittle light
11 years 8 months ago
cool
venerating the reels and wheels of a sexy and eerily cool drive-in movie experience....
that's just me attempting to deconstruct the title...a fools errand probably....but fun all the same!
scold away if I transgress into the ludicrous.
your poems are better than sudoku for teasing and testing the mind
p.s.
I am not a poetry stalker, I just like your work
Esker
11 years 8 months ago
Your mind is fast.
"machine alphabets" could be car makes..gmc amc chev vw
etc...never thought of that but it works well here..
Drive Inns where affordable and want by the new and old
will be here...for a while...
Seren
11 years 8 months ago
You never fail to take me on a journey
I love the poem Steven, There is so many ways you could take this poem it could be read in a few different ways with different outcomes
the machine alphabets
speakers and thighs
these last two lines made me think of a screen shining and reflecting their pictures onto all that surrounds
love JC xxx