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Nov 19, 2013
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the hidden thought
I caught her eyes,
She caught my eyes.
Who is to be blamed then?
Who could denounce to embrace beauty,
affirm its importance and learn its ways?
Who could in his right senses,
discard its thoughts, forget its impart and tarnish its image?
I maintain to sustain its essence in my life, with diligent effort to pass it on to posterity...twg
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Ian.T
11 years 7 months ago
twg
Sorry could not understand these two lines the logic left me some place, I shall await your reply then re read and critique better,
Yours Ian.T
Who could i his right senses,
discard its thoughts, forget its impart and tarnish its image?
twg
11 years 7 months ago
I am so grateful sir, i guess
I am so grateful sir, i guess I have corrected the error and now sounds quite meaningful....thanks for drawing ma attention.
Ian.T
11 years 7 months ago
twg
Logic prevailed, now sense has returned..
A good theme, would need another poem to show more feelings.
Know how you feel with that one glance across a void.
Like touching something that you know will hold you always,
Yours Ian.T
Lonnie
11 years 7 months ago
Interesting
Perhaps a bit beyond my scope of understanding, but intriguing none the less! Keep on keeping on!