Cruising Virgin Islands

A Virgin Island vacation that never ceases
in the memory of a poor country girl
a life of luxury sailing the seven seas

In grand dining rooms she feasted
adorned a natural style of hair curls
a virgin island vacation that never ceases

Here are islands that many would never see:
and experience worth more than pearls
a life of luxury sailing the seven seas

The rocking ship roar at high speeds
toward the next island turn
a virgin island vacation that never ceases

Sunbathing on the deck in the burning heat
its time to hit the showers and cool the burn
a life of luxury sailing the seven seas

This vacation is near its end, time to leave
return to a dull life in a boring world
a virgin island vacation that never ceases
a life of luxury sailing the seven seas

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My first villanelle poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Comments

Ian.T

11 years 10 months ago

Barbara

Loved that you cannot get rid of a cruise.
I would maybe think that the line:-
"a virgin island vacation that never cease"
I think it would be good to put an "S" on the end of this line.
Also there is a poetry form cant recall what it is , but it is where a line moves through the stanzas one place at a time as,
Stanza one line one
Stanza two second line
Stanza three line three and so on.
But I rarely write to any form lol.
Have a great day out there, Yours Ian.T

Barbara Writes

11 years 10 months ago

Thanks Ian

I'm don't wanna forget it. Was 50 when ever leaving the US it was grand experienced. I made the change and added the S
This form is a villanelle. I was experimenting to see if it made any sense. I been writing a lot of poetry in different forms such as sijo, I may share one here to see what you think.

loved

11 years 10 months ago

well I am not as intelligent as Ian

but I know good poetry
if and when I read one
That's how i composed

A Maestro is born

they all say it 's my best
so I have stopped posting anymore

I recall a Nobel aspirant say
Never give me a Nobel
it will be like like asking me
to throw away my belt..

Barbara Writes

11 years 10 months ago

Thanks loved

Hearing from you is a joy.