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Dec 16, 2013
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SLAUGHTER
SLAUGHTER
Slowly they slither
surrepticiously
from dark hidden places
when suddenly they strike
tongue needle sharp
deep
deep into the heart
to the death of all Beauty
UNA MATANZA
piano piano scivolano
da luoghi nascosti nel buio
quando all' impproviso
colpiscono
con lingua tagliente
profondo
profondo nel cuore
per la morte
di tutta Belleza
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
11 years 6 months ago
I suppose
you're talking about words here joe. If so, yes I agree they are killers.
Well put indeed.
Is thr repetitive of deep in separate lines intentional? I don't think you even need to repeat it but the piece is yours and you know better.
Geremia
11 years 6 months ago
Words it is.. "deep" 2x
Words it is.. "deep" 2x was an intentional hyperbole.
Thanks for reading me :)
joe