The Fox

I think it could do with a little tidying up. Some of these suggestions may seem trivial but just consider them and perhaps you will see that the cumulative effect tightens up the poem.

I was transfixed for so briefly, [lose 'for' and add a line break]
on that breathless summer's day

Your eyes gold with such ancient intelligence [I'm glad you didn't say 'wisdom', I might have puked. Still not comfortable with intelligence, I haven't seen it in a fox's eyes, maybe that's just me]

A feral creature of mass extermination [grammar. You need to replace 'of' with something that means 'near', 'threatened by' or 'subject to'. See the difference?]

Suddenly there was only swaying grasses and you where gone.
either
Suddenly there were only swaying grasses and you were gone. [were!]
or
Suddenly there was only swaying grass and you were gone.

Like I said, small changes, they often make a big difference.

An impressive first post, I look forward to more.

Welcome to Neopoet and i agree with you, they certainly have intelligent eyes. I have two Germain Sheperds i walk regularly in woods near my home. The Fox have a den there and follow the dogs as they walk and chase the balls i throw for them, especially in the winters morning and evenings. They have the intellegence to know that if they stay a certain distance, there is no danger from the dogs. They also have preplanned escape routes as i've seen several times when they're startled. Anyway before i ramble on, i think your poem describes the Fox perfectly. A heartfelt welcome to Neopoet, i look forward to reading more of your poems. Regards Roscoe..

Your poem is lovely - beautiful in its simplicity. I love your description of the foxes fur and eyes and the feeling of being mesmerized and caught up in the moment.

This was uncomplicated and a joy contemplate! ( but sad to think of their plight )

Love Mand xxxxx

I pictured every image you painted and that indeed your poem conveyed. Nicely written, there is something very peaceful in reading this poem