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Then, Afterwards

Were l able to truly play guitar
like the masters of the art,
I'd play for you the sweetest melodies;

then afterwards, within your eyes
I'd be inspired then to write,
with that feeling flowing through me like a breeze.

I wish l better understood
the meaning of my life,
or better yet the meaning that is yours;

then afterwards, within your heart
my vision would then clear,
and l'd comfort you whilste opening your doors.

l'd like for me to really know
what attracts your eyes away,
or also what attracts them back to me;

then afterwards, within my song
you'd yearn to hear much more,
so, for forever you would hear my melody.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Esker

Esker

11 years 3 months ago

i like your variety of work

i remember a greek story myth....the male enticing the female from
the land of the dead...the perilous journey and the warning to not
look back as he lulled the underworld gods with his music.....but
at the last moment in the light from darkness he looked back
and she was stolen back beneath the earth....this was a stop
action film that i saw very early...but with our storytelling in our
family and stories from books it was an introduction to the
written and cinema arts......

music so important

like a siren song
the heros tales

thank you!

docmaverick

docmaverick

11 years ago

Thanx esker...

....l sincerely mean it. Thank-you very much for your kindly words.
your fellow poet, & colleague;
docmaverick.