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Mar 07, 2014
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Passing by
Everyday passing by
Going tik tok
Playing face, telling lies
Give mock
Never coming near don't
Ring ring
Don't knock
— Tessadiana, Mar 07, 2014
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
Ian.T
12 years 3 months ago
Tess
Welcome to your first piece, you have been a member for quite a while now, so it is good that you have at last streamed some writing for us to see. I hope you don't pass us by again good theme just needs more of you, Yours ian.T
Esker
12 years 3 months ago
i was dreaming awake today....
ttrying to make sense or control
my world..my thoughts..
and i thought of digital
the comp language..
10011101100111010110101001110101011
this language..
then i thought of the one being raised the zero
laying flat....which is physical formed way of
this being read on applications
which means..
i am listening to rap now
because you can challenge
in a much more intelligent
way then just the basic metaldeath
music that i like and enjoy
but rap is deeper
and poetic..
like shakeasperes
wit
and characters
in intense emotional
exchanges can
duel
there a duel
there is great beauty
in this..
the intensity is like a soft
amaazing blast
like a comet ..
celestial..
thank you
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