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Mar 21, 2014
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LOVE HAS PASSED
Love has passed us
like the wind
over the mountains
into shadow
Here now, we rove
Wretched
like ghosts
under these starless skies
and grey shores
bound in grief
and in misery
Until the passing of time.
Love has passed
like the wind
into Shadow.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: ~the best years are in yesterday~
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
weirdelf
11 years 3 months ago
I can't believe I have missed your work until now
there is a wonderous elegance to this piece that elevates it beyond the mundane. I will be sure to check out your earlier works.
I'm afraid I can offer no constructive criticism however perhaps hearing it in another's voice may offer some perspective?
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0wcWvwU0088
WonderGolly
11 years 3 months ago
many thanks to you for read.
many thanks to you for read. relieving to know the subject line is quite clear beyond the “mundane". Lil
bless
alidzain
11 years 3 months ago
Wow
I like this, man. I agree with Jess. It is a class of its own. I'm going to check out the rest of your works. Good job Keep on writing.
Alid
WonderGolly
11 years 3 months ago
blessed to have you around
blessed to have you around and thanks for the encouragement.
respects