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docmaverick
docmaverick
May 08, 2014 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Negativendy

Tall grass adorns the meadow
as the leaves all seem to fade,

sunshine rays help highlight
when an effort has been made.

Let not every shadow
confuse your perspective,

know inside your heart of hearts
it's all in how you live.

Ignore night's final canopy
have others do the same,

treat the light respectfully
treat it not, as if a game.

Lift high your every hopeful wish
let all your needs be known,

try and help another's plight
that's how friendships can be grown.

And down the path to the meadow fair
spend time there, be at peace,

try cultivating many smiles
so negativendy can cease.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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IKnowNoBox

11 years 1 month ago

Well written

very telling of your climate, and geographic location. It really brings me there. Good to see you are still here on Neo as well, I miss the ol' gang.

In ink,
david

Ian.T

Ian.T

11 years 1 month ago

What's up Doc

I see to have an audience and be mentioned on the www you have pulled an Esker on us by making up a word "Negativendy"
We will love and read your words without this strain on Oxford's dictionary service lol.
Great to read and a well written piece just the title needs a look at.
Take care young Doc, Yours as always, Ian.T

weirdelf

weirdelf

11 years 1 month ago

Once a preacher always a preacher.

When you grow the balls to write about yourself, real issues or real poetry you might become a real poet. Whenever you you use "you". the second person, you are nothing but versifying with the arrogance to think you know better than other people.

docmaverick

docmaverick

11 years ago

hey elf...

...it was just a fucking poem ! Since when are we not allowed to voice an opinion !?!.
Get a "grip",
Doc.

weirdelf

weirdelf

11 years ago

it's a gripe I've had with you ever since I've known you

You have the potential and word skills to be a bloody fine poet if you could just stop preaching! Really. Please just pause for a second when you find yourself writing in the second person and ask yourself "what makes me better than my reader?"