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May 13, 2014
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Lover's note
no one owns you
by now
so many would have shared
but one truth you convey
love alone can be shared
in real earnestness
when two souls are compared
to a pair of flowers
swaying in the sunny breeze
you two give us all such a thought
as one's love
is in the air
who soever may we be
do with us your secret love share
then notes we will compare
who amongst us
is a better pair
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
11 years 1 month ago
Ewww!
Lovers do not compare the better pair.
loved
11 years 1 month ago
thereby
meaning good ...bad or indifferent.....
weirdelf
11 years 1 month ago
Bad
"then notes we will compare
who amongst us
is a better pair"
loved
11 years 1 month ago
okay shall
redo and not compare
if that's your wish too