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Jun 01, 2014
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Fire in my bones
Words appear as
fire in my bones
memories like fuel on red ashes
Writing things down
cools the flames burning
At the end of the day
I am who I am
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
11 years 1 month ago
hello barbra
This is so simple but so expressive as I see it. I really like it. Only the word "hot" doesn't look right to describe the flames...Maybe another adjective or even nothing is needed there.
just thoughts. I really enjoyed . Hope all is well.
Barbara Writes
11 years 1 month ago
thanks Rula
I guess flames explains itself as being hot since its aflame. Lol
alidzain
11 years 1 month ago
Hi Barbara
I must say I really enjoy reading this piece. Thanks for sharing!
Alid
Barbara Writes
11 years 1 month ago
Alid
thanks you are welcome
Ian.T
11 years 1 month ago
Barbara
A great theme expressed in a few words, lovely,
Yours Ian.T
Barbara Writes
11 years 1 month ago
thanks Ian
appreciate the kind critique
emeka ozurumba
11 years 1 month ago
the words were too few for me
the words were too few for me, but fine initiative please add more conception to the poem for its longevity and uniqueness
Barbara Writes
11 years 1 month ago
emeka
thanks