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A killer seen
Jack Sparrow here, let me tell you
 I escaped from him, I tell a story true
 He was killing a couple I heard the screams
 A nightmare of horrid dreams
I crept up to see what was going on
 He spied me before very long
 He let out a cry that froze my gait
 Advancing on me so full of hate
He stopped about ten feet away
 My blood froze at what I saw that day
 I had brought my double barrelled gun
 I would show him that it was no fun
 He stood there amidst the gore
 A smile flickered as they were no more
 Temptation was his new game
 Butchering all the sick and lame
 I challenged his right to be
 His grey black eyes bored into me
 Curses I had to think strategy
 Of how to take him down this time
 Knowing his world now touched mine
 Be gone I muttered deep and low
 You cursed man just up and go
 I have no more feelings for you.
 He laughed yes stood and laughed
 Blood running down his arms
 This site should have set off the alarm
 That I had wandered to close this time
 He didn’t know that I had protection so
 It came to him in the blink of an eye
 A lead ball sped from out of my hand
 To tear at him but the second, a misfire
 Damn him to hell, I turned and had to run
 Weapon no good, I wished for a sword
 I knew it just made him angrier still
 My life now in danger, I just felt ill
 I ran and hid there, shaking away.
 I hoped he wouldn’t find me that day
 I wouldn’t be talking to you if he had
 Just smile for me as I am so glad.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A sort of killer from long ago I wrote it just now and couldn't let it go without sharing it with you the few, a small Idea of how the pink workshop may proceed.. Yours Ian.T
Style/Type: Free verse
        Review Request Direction:
        What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
      
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
 
                
Comments
Rula
11 years 1 month ago
I like it when
you rhyme Ian. I thought you can follow a better rhyme scheme, or you either rhyme or no rhyme at all. I don't know what you and others have in mind regarding this.
And yes, I see you're ready for Wesley's pink workshop. LOL
Ian.T
11 years 1 month ago
Rula
I initially wrote this for the workshop, but Wesley says we are going to write a couple of Stanzas at a time, so I thought why waste a write, and put it on stream.
Thanks for your visit and comment, you take care out there, Yours Ian.T