The Glass Box

(for Jennien)

Masses of people rush by me
like large waves of oil spilled sea
crashing into the streets of tomorrow.
I look to their eyes only to see
a disc spinning like and old 45
that keeps bumping and skipping at the end

and

I feel like a mouse in a maze
pressing my hands against their path
feeling nothing but cold resistance.
I turn to follow...Still,
it's the same.
I turn -- and I turn again.
Still, there is nothing except my tears
washing like rain down those windows
the years have swollen shut.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, Henry Rollins, Langston Hughes, Emily Dickinson

Comments

Ian.T

10 years 11 months ago

8men

Liked this piece, though would the 45 be better as CD they sometimes seem to skip and bump if they are at the end of their use, don't want you to label yourself as old lol,
Yours Ian.T

eightmenout

10 years 11 months ago

Ian

Thanks for stopping by. I don't mind showing my age with this one.

Scott

Rula

10 years 11 months ago

Hello Scott

this is an oddly dark and poignant piece. I thought that there are some verses go ambiguous.
+As a reader, I would like to know (within the poem itself) for example who is "Jennine", or what is the use of just mentioning her anyway?

I especially liked "a disc spinning like and old 45"
and the last line "the years have swollen shut"

I thought they are fresh re the word choice.

Hope your worry and the weary thoughts would wash soon.

eightmenout

10 years 11 months ago

Rula

Good to hear from you. The poem is dedicated (for) Jennien. She is a friend going through a difficult time and I was expressing the feelings I had as I heard her talk about being in a glass box.

Thank you for the compliments. My worry and weary thoughts are getting better. Hopefully that will translate into my writing soon.

Scott

Rula

10 years 11 months ago

Well Scott

many thanks for the clarification especially about the glass box!
and it was my fault that I didn't get the (for) Jennine earlier.
I wish her a full recovery..

Ian.T

10 years 11 months ago

"Jennine",

Scott, give her our very best thoughts and let her know we care.
That you care is grand, to write of or for her is good,
Go well my friend and know we think of you there,
Yours Ian.T