Thanks for your visit and very generous comment. It has been a while since I posted something, in fact the first since visiting my son and daughter-in-law in Canada. Nice to know it worked out good enough.

Much love..,

wesley snow

10 years 10 months ago

This piece of minimulist poetry

is quite good. I have no suggestions on how to improve it.

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Hi Wesley

Thanks for stopping by. Nice to know you find it quite good.

Regards,

lovedly

10 years 10 months ago

you are going to be

one day a cynosure
of many an eye
that I do assure

your poetry enlightens me
more and more.....

what//who
am I to take such a decision
in the doldrums of poetic wisdom
I have no valid position

still I dare and say
my friend some day
one day
you will be what I do say

a prophet is always recognised
in a foreign land
now away from India in Canada you stand
now also my land!

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Hi Loved

Thanks for your generous comment and best wishes. I must confess though that I am still on a learning curve and have a long way to go. One thing is sure though that I am loving Canada, it's weather, nature, people. It is a great pleasure to have my evening walks too.

Regards,

lovedly

10 years 10 months ago

don't miss ur country

it's there where you belong
a foreign country is foreign only
makes u run
any time
so enjoy ur walk
i cut grass!

but frankly tell me
will I ever be able to learn ?

Rula

10 years 10 months ago

Wow!

An amazing capture there raj. I couldn't think of anything to improve
I just wished those moments won't ever fade.
Great work!

weirdelf

10 years 10 months ago

Excelellent write

I like to see scienctific knowledge incorporated in poetry. Many great scientists were also fine poets.

I question the use of he word 'fading' in the last line, if something fades it ends up black, not white.
Perhaps words akin to 'mixing', 'blending', morphing', 'transmuting, 'transcending'.

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Jess

Thanks for the visit and sharing your suggestion. I do agree with what you have said about outcome of fading in the scientific context. I wish to clarify that, here I had used "white" in the context of after life. Yet, your suggestion about changing the word "fading" and offering a few alternatives is appreciated and I am actively considering the same.

Thanks & regards,

lovedly

10 years 10 months ago

when some thing fades

it just fades away
and merges into oblivion
which is actually
invisible

like gone with the wind

1. To lose brightness, loudness, or brilliance gradually; dim: The lights and music faded as we set sail from the harbor.
2. To lose freshness; wither: summer flowers that had faded.
3. To lose strength or vitality; wane: youthful energy that had faded over the years.

4. To disappear gradually; vanish: a hope that faded.

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Loved

Appreciate your visiting again and sharing your perception about fading.

Regards,

lovedly

10 years 10 months ago

thanks raj

what happened to my PM?

Lonnie

10 years 10 months ago

Nicely done, raj!

If more could be expressed in fewer words, I certainly don't know how! Your poem shows feeling, honesty, and a substantial backbone of wisdom that delivers a solid punch! Good write!

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Hi Lonnie

Thanks for your visit and your crisp and appreciative comment. Good to know you perceived a lot between those few lines.

Regards,

Seren

10 years 10 months ago

Dearest Raj

what a lovely little poem, I cant see anything to suggest

you really captured a fine picture in my mind as I read this

beautifully done hun

love and hugs Jayne xxxxx

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I really appreciate your taking time to visit this poem in spite of the fact that you are recuperating after a major surgery. Your comment is like tonic and would keep me inspired to learn and write more.

Take best care.

Much love, hugs and very best wishes to get completely well soon...