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Little Yellow Leaf
I gazed in amazement, in this same day
As I witnessed something indescribable, by any poet
A single moment, so astonishing, so incredibly real
My heart, thumps furiously at my heaving chest
My heart, has misplaced its breath
Exactly like that feeling you get
When you place your face out the window of a moving vehicle
As you attempt to inhale
Choke
I gulp
I cry
With theses dreary, dreamy, morose eyes, I watched
A single tree
Alarmingly more caring and romantic than the rest
Clinging, clenching
With the strength of a protective mother
To a frail, yet stunning, little yellow leaf
The last among its branches
So afraid to be alone
Cold and bare
Spring, summer, and fall have crept by so swiftly
And ahead lies the winter
A season of death
When only chills grow
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I hope this site is different than others. just opened an account
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
emeka ozurumba
11 years 1 month ago
good feelings
very effective poem,but it seems almost in epistemology
Benjamin
11 years 1 month ago
It is. thank you for the kind
It is. thank you for the kind words.