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Jan 12, 2011
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Narcotic Rhythm
Narcotic rhythm
pounding beat,
hypnotize and set me free.
When that sound hits,
I lose myself,
I let go.
Chorus
Turn up the heat,
make me high.
Body sways, releasing me.
Chorus
Stomp and shout.
A drug free buzz,
body moves, relieving me.
Bass rips through my chest,
I become more like myself,
with every depression of the keys.
Crazy darkness,
wraps me in it’s web,
and i'm gone.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lou
15 years 3 months ago
Shirl
Ive been writing lyrics for a while, remember the chat I hosted?
I like the title , so I will keep that.
Thank you
Love Lou
raj
15 years 3 months ago
Dear Lou...
in this write you have scripted so very well how the beats & rhythm temper our moods ..feelings and emotions...atleast that's what i perceived after reading your write...i enjoyed it..
warmly...
lou
15 years 3 months ago
Raj
thank you
raj
15 years 3 months ago
Lou
was my perception right?
warmly..
lou
15 years 3 months ago
Raj
you are correct.
lou
lou
15 years 3 months ago
Shirl
Hate to admit it but when I looked at the original title, it sounded like something a police man would do. Lol
But don't gloat, lmao.
Love Lou
lou
15 years 3 months ago
JC
As you know i started writing lyrics a little while before i hosted the lyric chat afternoon. it frees you up.
lou