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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Sep 06, 2014 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Soliloquy In Silence I've Suffered You

I've caused much discomfort
in the lives of many
death and pestilence
always leave me behind

annoying or tedious persons
take liberties with my sensations
even those doing great things for others
willingly take me upon themselves

sometimes people will take me on
just to say what they must
then there are those putting forth
effort for the good
getting me in return

I'm often used as a slogan in fitness centers
proscribed in penalties for
disobedience and shortcomings
I am pain.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I posted in workshop bc I'm on a role storytelling dramatic verse and Wesley said don't stop posting. So here's another one from me.

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

mand

mand

10 years 10 months ago

Hi Barbara

This poem is of a high standard - well thought out and so true!

wouldn't this be good for WS dramatic verse - a soliloquy? or does it have to be an actual person speaking?

Very well done Barbara :)

Love Mand xxxx

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 10 months ago

Mand

Thanks when I get something I get it well. Lol. It would be bc I based on the workshop. I didn't know it Wes want me posting more than one to the WS. Bc I will run out of control when I learn something new like storytelling dramatic verse.

No it don't halve to be a actual person bc Stan soliloquy is about death. It how I came up with a soliloquy for pain.

Thanks for reading.

L

Lonnie

10 years 10 months ago

Hey Barbara,

Great topic with good, honest, imagery that makes the poem all that much better! You've done yourself proud with this one!

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 10 months ago

Thanks Lonnie

Been a minute since I heard from you. Stan inspired this write when he wrote "In Shadows" hehe

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 10 months ago

Thanks Lonnie

Been a minute since I heard from you. Stan inspired this write when he wrote "In Shadows" hehe

wesley snow

wesley snow

10 years 10 months ago

The only reason you might not want to post more

is to keep from pushing others out. I don't mind. I'm glad you've caught on to something you like. That was the chief purpose of the workshop and I hope this experiment influences all of your poetry.
This a better monologue than your others because the character is so clearly defined. Even (like Stan's) if we don't know the identity of the speaker until the end, we nevertheless know its personality.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 10 months ago

Yes yes

I thinking hard about my real play I almost came up with the character. But need more help reading other th get it figured out. You said find character first I meditating hard on that. The write story?

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 10 months ago

Wes

Okay I was feeling a bit rush. I'm working on one where Im Adam voice, there's Eve voice and god voice. The subject is not intended to cause controversy.. It simply a scriptural play.

R

raj

10 years 10 months ago

Barbara

The comments made by others are worthy of your effort in coming up with this one. It is indeed good.

Regards,

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

10 years 10 months ago

Raj

Thanks raj, I was up to 3am writing it. My brain wouldn't quit till it was done. I'm rested and is feeling a lot better. But is still under the weather right now.