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Sep 08, 2014
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sorry and retort a re-thought!
Fundamentals of life
are just two
for me and you
first
if you are wrong
simply say
sorry!
but if you are dead sure
you are right
fight!
retort
till things you sort...
remember these two
and be happy
let the Lord take care of after life
in which who still believe
you too
okay do!
take care
not to please!
me
loved...
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
mand
10 years 10 months ago
Wow!
Lovedly this is the best of yours yet! It's clear, precise, to the point and really good advice!
The only adjustments I would make would be: ( and it is only me )
retort till things are sorted......
let the Lord take care of "the" after life.
of course it's up to you! either way this is the best!
LOve Mand xxxx
lovedly
10 years 10 months ago
thanks for the pat
howz zat now tis!
when I compose
it's me only
a poet so lonely!
alidzain
10 years 10 months ago
simple
and direct. Good one.
Alid
lovedly
10 years 10 months ago
good and
thanks
Sheba
10 years 10 months ago
I have to agree with mand, I
I have to agree with mand, I like this very much. Friendship poems are my favorite, nice job.
lovedly
10 years 10 months ago
I read you
and thank you
you skipped my comment
so I did not again want to lament
you are a fresher here,
i know
but one who will
in leaps and bounds grow.