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Study in Pink... Detective French - Sixth
Detecting suspects and divining truth
is what Guy has done since his youth
Making sense of all the facts
figuring out most murderous acts
The latest test of his detecting skill
is a most disturbing kind of kill
A headless body has been found
lying on the blood-soaked ground
No head is found on the street named Fleet
No clues to make the mystery neat
A. Fitzroy behind the 'Grand'
struck down and out by unknown hand
Who can say what any have seen?
Is there witness? There may have been!
Detective French knows that he must walk
The street is usually, where there is talk
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This sets the scene for Detective Guy French to begin his investigation, Maybe he will find an unknown witness to the crime! I hope I have also fixed the form to everyone's satisfaction?
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
wesley snow
10 years 9 months ago
I think you jumped the gun.
Stan and Ian were slated before you, but don't withdraw. We'll just change the order of go and you will always follow Barbara. Does that make sense? We're going in the order of names on the syllabus, but now you're bumped up, so we don't have to change your entry. I do so hope this makes sense. You need to number your entry. I think you are number six. If I'm wrong someone correct me.
Barbara Writes
10 years 9 months ago
Wes
I'll check
Geezer
10 years 9 months ago
Sorry...
I didn't mean to get ahead; as a matter of fact, I thought I was behind. O.K I will follow Barbara.
I will also fix form.
Barbara Writes
10 years 9 months ago
Geezer
You were in the right order. You came right me. Me and Wesley got to get on the same page.
wesley snow
10 years 9 months ago
Thank you Barbara
you're my own personal saint. I couldn't do this without you.
Barbara Writes
10 years 9 months ago
Lol
We gonna fix this i already see it in my head.
Barbara Writes
10 years 9 months ago
Geezer
Guidelines are. Its to be written in eight lines. Two stanza. Total 16 lines.
Geezer
10 years 9 months ago
Sorry...
I will fix the form.
alidzain
10 years 9 months ago
A good intro
for the detective in the poem.Maybe one can follow up with the detectives interviewing the suspects and witnesses.
Alid
raj
10 years 9 months ago
Geezer
I liked your posting, profiling Guy French the detective is done nicely. I liked the way you have kept focus by touching on some other characters making your poem breathe.
Regards,
Barbara Writes
10 years 9 months ago
I like your take
Form is good.
lonlyhrtsclub13
10 years 9 months ago
this I like
Good introduction and tie into the crime scene. Nice description of details and events.
Rula
10 years 9 months ago
I see everyone is interested
in describing his own character. You have done your job well Detective Gee.
Geezer
10 years 9 months ago
Thank you Rula...
I hope that I continue to do as good a job. ~ Gee
Barbara Writes
10 years 9 months ago
Describing character
I thought that how it was suppose to go. Then you ales describe other characters from you character point of blue.