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Oct 06, 2014
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I sat on a volkswagon.today,
it didn't do much.
I sat on a beetle....it squished.
Today I learned a valuable lessson.
When sitting on a volkswagon,
use an elephant.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
10 years 9 months ago
Jess
I love the projected humour, there I saw a wild man from Australia sitting atop an elephant squishing beetles,
There hiding in the folds of his coat a Kookaburra shouting encouragement.
You be careful, use an Indian Elephant they is much quieter..
Lol, Yours, Ian.
weirdelf
10 years 9 months ago
There are no wild lephants in Australia,
I stole i from a circus,'ta,
Esker
10 years 9 months ago
Poetry!
this is a pure form of work
jestful and thought tended
trickster material!.............
Thank You!
weirdelf
10 years 9 months ago
Weirdelf
aka Loki, aka Hermes.
Ta
Ian.T
10 years 9 months ago
Sarah
Come on get it write you must start to say "That's Weirdelf " this is correct way to write, if you is going to say it your way Weird is Weird, wonder where his handle came from, and he steals lephants, but don't forget to send him love he loves that,
Yours, J Sparrow
Geezer
10 years 9 months ago
Just the kind...
of humor that one would expect from a Weirdelf ! I loved it! Short, funny and totally true! ~ Gee
weirdelf
10 years 9 months ago
ta Gee
I like to cause a giggle and offence, as well you know.
wesley snow
10 years 9 months ago
Poetry.
What a difficult concept.
This is truly poetic... but whadda I know?
weirdelf
10 years 9 months ago
You know
and you know you know.
Poetry can be anything from limerick to epic as long as it it provokes.
wesley snow
10 years 9 months ago
Indeed.
Did you know Barack Obama wrote poetry in college? It's not very good, but it was a good effort and most definitely poetry... so to speak.
We need a workshop on The Limerick.
I won't run it, but I'll join it. I have a book of limericks and they are all disgusting. All of them. Each and every one is baudy and rude.
Maybe you should run it.
weirdelf
10 years 9 months ago
Oh fuck yeah! I would love to run such a workshop.
I have offered the challenge before, to write a limerick without comic intent. No-one has succeeded yet. It is a very interesting challenge about form versus content.
A poet called Wesley decreed
that limericks were all a misdeed
He failed to mention
that strict attention
to form were part of the deed
wesley snow
10 years 9 months ago
Yes!
That's the first none disgusting limerick I have ever read and I bought the book just to find such an animal.
You're on for the workshop if you've the fortitude.
I'm now Co-Director for the Workshop Program now, so these are the decisions.