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Oct 08, 2014
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#079
blush blue
in all the subtle rush
whom would
stand out
the secret
was that there
was no value
there was no key
in a palm
of eternity
i venture
a density
a value
in meaning
instead
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
emeka ozurumba
10 years 9 months ago
very effective poem
a meaning profound wise one
Esker
10 years 9 months ago
it was an internal question
then I realized that the value is outside..
someone said this to me...
change the outside..
meaning maybe Im locked inside
which is the old biblical parable
about the knocking door thing....
I like the stories and parables
to think about and ponder
because they are widespread enough
in my teaching..learned culture
but there is so much more out there...
Thank You!
Ian.T
10 years 9 months ago
Steve
Liked this one, and your extra comment gave it perspective..
Then you must stand outside to see your true self,
Not many will tell you what they see and feel.
We in this life are full of shit trying most times to please.
Truth is always hidden by others, it is only you that can see the real you either inside or out.
But not to worry from the things I have read of yours over the years, you are good.
Yours Ian.T