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weirdelf
weirdelf
Oct 21, 2014 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Antifib

Real eyes
realise
real lies

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 9 months ago

ta

I said it as a quip in conversation and jotted it down in my (never-leave-home-without-it) notebook intending to write it up into a poem, then found that it felt fully finalised.

Esker

Esker

10 years 9 months ago

The idea of a voice is to be heard

The Idea of eyes is to be seen

hearing is saying
and seeing is ....

aha! I dont know...

I like this...Its an internal and external
logic gate! We Unsee so much
as we are supposed too
for me anyway...

Stating....
in an illusionary world

I like the poem elf!
believe it or not I have many
who do not Unsee!!

Thank You!

Esker

Esker

10 years 9 months ago

We dont have a voice..

I know many that feel this way..
others say Silence will allow you to See...
that kind of logic too...philosophy
and we have no voice...

but I think we do....
We speak and we assume
we are not heard
but people listen

People see
more then we know
and can assume
to not know

R

raj

10 years 9 months ago

Jess

This is truly a gem of a thought which also has a phonetic grace. Good that you jotted it down and posted it hear.

Regards,

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 9 months ago

Jess

I didn't real eyes
Or Understand
Not Under Stand
Understand is the floor
Understand??

Quite a quaint quip there young Elf,
makes us think and it hurts,
Where's those bloody pills.
Loves yu, Yours Ian.T

Frost Smith

Frost Smith

10 years 8 months ago

Interesting you would opt for

Interesting you would opt for realise instead realize and with three lines you are able to condemn a farce. Would like to see this expanded upon into full blown satiracal stanzas but enjoyed the dagger like quick quip, cheers

p.s. the drop bears aint got me yet old frined

weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 8 months ago

Good to see you Frost,

that is just Anglo vs American spelling, Aussies use Anglo.
Yes, it was my original intention to use it as the base for a longer poem, however it just felt complete when I wrote it down.

Rula

Rula

10 years 8 months ago

thumbs up!

good one in so few words. My cup of tea of late, but don't ;et Wes know :) (more grins)

weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 8 months ago

I genuinely laugh out loud

there is room in the world of poetry for the very short and the very long, Wes claims to have learned from me and I have certainly learned from him.
Thank you, Rula.

weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 8 months ago

I am not talking to you

until you admit who your oft referred to father is.
If I got it first guess, just say so. You know that though we fought often we respect each other.

weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 8 months ago

a genuine grin on my face

it was you playing games, not me.
I respect your dad enormously. We fought like cats and dogs when we first met, probably because we are such similar ratbags.
Ok, all communication between us now is just about your poetry.

BettyBuff

BettyBuff

10 years 8 months ago

The Eyes Have It!

"Ayes" ....as in "the ayes have it"...In Parliament, meaning Yes!

'Nuff said.
Ells x

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 8 months ago

Jess

I with you have travelled around
Now I would like to break new ground.
A limerick is what this is all about
I shall try my best my dear Elf
Put my name down, it's lonely on the shelf.
Yours, Ian..

weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 8 months ago

All welcome

It will be a quick workshop,
one submission each.
More if you like, I'm not Tony Abbott