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Remembering Dad

He wasn't a big man by nature
but he had a big heart inside.
He's a teacher, a thinker
who pushed you to greater heights.

He used to say humans are never meant to be
as still as stagnant water
if you are not moving forward,
you're not embracing life.

We had our differences,
we had our arguments
but when I was down with fever,
he would be there to offer me a hug

He never said "I love you."
but he showed it with his actions.
He was a strict disciplinarian
but he was also a loving father.

At times when I am alone
and life seems too great a burden,
I find myself remembering his words
and within them I find a way
to calm my troubled heart and
untangle the messy thoughts in my mind
to set me free.

Thank you, Dad for everything.
I wouldn't be the man that I am
without your teachings...

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

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Comments

weirdelf

weirdelf

10 years 8 months ago

I'm really not sure about your mixing of tenses.

It works in a way, showing that though he has died he lives within your heart and memories. Maybe if you "kept him alive" from the first line
He isn't a big man by nature

then only in the final stanza let him go

It feels as if he is reaching me
from the grave to comfort me.
Thank you, Dad for everything.
I wouldn't be the man that I am
without your teachings...

Just a suggestion

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 8 months ago

Thank you

for the visit and the suggestion, Jess.

Alid