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Can you make a limerick serious?

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Digital Drugs

Digital drugs are becoming the dread
that fears the world, youth are dead
with beats and sounds
that cost but pounds
the venom drone, on and on, fast spread.

To learn more:
http://www.wired.com/2010/07/digital-drugs/

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Rula

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

Thank you

Spot on. Edited accordingly.
Appreciate the visit and the comment.

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 7 months ago

Salaam, Rula

Interesting concept but I still don't understand what do you mean by "digital drugs". Care to elaborate?

Alid

Rula

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

Salaam Khalid

this is a new kind of drugs. I have added a link for more information. VERY dangerous.

Rula

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

So I hope

it's not only a serious limerick, but an eye opener too.
I missed you. Where have you been. Hope all is well brother.

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 7 months ago

I'm here and there, sister

Kinda busy after some unexpected happenings but I did post some poetry here. The latest is "Breaking Free", its about freeing oneself from hypocrisy.

Alid

wesley snow

wesley snow

10 years 7 months ago

I suffer withdrawal from my digital drugs all the time.

The damn computers keep breaking or at the very least behaving as if possessed.

MOG! You can run, but... I'll hunt to the ends of the Earth.

The poem's subject is relevant, so it certainly qualifies as serious, but I'm not convinced I hear a limerick in the rhythm.

Rula

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

positive

it is not the typical meter of the limerick, but I heard jess saying he's only talking about meter if it's jarring, thus I hope content is what he is after.

wesley snow

wesley snow

10 years 7 months ago

I am so out of my depth here it's not funny.

I cannot use this rhythm to write anything of serious worth. It makes me laugh only, even when I try serious subjects.
The Holocaust, Aids, Climate Change, bad poetry, you should hear the guffaws.

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 7 months ago

Rula

I am quite close to making this limerick thing,
Yours it near to the write way but here I will say:-

The typical rhythm of a limerick is like this:-

bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH.

bah = delicate syllable.. BAH= hard syllable..

Is the right way,
maybe the sheep know better,
still I shall try harder with my letter.

Yours J Sparrow
("John" not Jack this time the four or five of us are doing fine.lol)

wesley snow

wesley snow

10 years 7 months ago

Sit down.

The meter is catalyctic anapest with judicious use of iambs here and there. A little bit of messing it about is okay, but to change the meter you described with your bahs is to be abhorred. It's a little like the riddle game. Cheating is against the rules even for cheaters.