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Nov 04, 2014
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Digital Drugs
Digital drugs are becoming the dread
that fears the world, youth are dead
with beats and sounds
that cost but pounds
the venom drone, on and on, fast spread.
To learn more:
http://www.wired.com/2010/07/digital-drugs/
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
10 years 7 months ago
Thank you
Spot on. Edited accordingly.
Appreciate the visit and the comment.
alidzain
10 years 7 months ago
Salaam, Rula
Interesting concept but I still don't understand what do you mean by "digital drugs". Care to elaborate?
Alid
Rula
10 years 7 months ago
Salaam Khalid
this is a new kind of drugs. I have added a link for more information. VERY dangerous.
alidzain
10 years 7 months ago
Shukran Rula
I didn't even know it existed till now.
Alid
Rula
10 years 7 months ago
So I hope
it's not only a serious limerick, but an eye opener too.
I missed you. Where have you been. Hope all is well brother.
alidzain
10 years 7 months ago
I'm here and there, sister
Kinda busy after some unexpected happenings but I did post some poetry here. The latest is "Breaking Free", its about freeing oneself from hypocrisy.
Alid
wesley snow
10 years 7 months ago
I suffer withdrawal from my digital drugs all the time.
The damn computers keep breaking or at the very least behaving as if possessed.
MOG! You can run, but... I'll hunt to the ends of the Earth.
The poem's subject is relevant, so it certainly qualifies as serious, but I'm not convinced I hear a limerick in the rhythm.
Rula
10 years 7 months ago
positive
it is not the typical meter of the limerick, but I heard jess saying he's only talking about meter if it's jarring, thus I hope content is what he is after.
wesley snow
10 years 7 months ago
I am so out of my depth here it's not funny.
I cannot use this rhythm to write anything of serious worth. It makes me laugh only, even when I try serious subjects.
The Holocaust, Aids, Climate Change, bad poetry, you should hear the guffaws.
Ian.T
10 years 7 months ago
Rula
I am quite close to making this limerick thing,
Yours it near to the write way but here I will say:-
The typical rhythm of a limerick is like this:-
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH.
bah = delicate syllable.. BAH= hard syllable..
Is the right way,
maybe the sheep know better,
still I shall try harder with my letter.
Yours J Sparrow
("John" not Jack this time the four or five of us are doing fine.lol)
wesley snow
10 years 7 months ago
Sit down.
The meter is catalyctic anapest with judicious use of iambs here and there. A little bit of messing it about is okay, but to change the meter you described with your bahs is to be abhorred. It's a little like the riddle game. Cheating is against the rules even for cheaters.