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Dec 01, 2014
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Seeding of a Thought
In mind seeds a thought
dwelling in the sub conscious
till births a poem
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
mand
10 years 7 months ago
Hi Raj
Nice senryu! Syllable count looks good to me. I like the idea that a seed of thought dwelling in the sub conscious is poised ready to give birth to a poem! Very imaginative!
Love to you!
Mand xxxx
raj
10 years 7 months ago
Hi Mand
Good to see you after a while. Thanks for dropping by and your comment. Good to know you liked the thought.
Much love n hugs...
judyanne
10 years 7 months ago
hi Raj
as Mand says (hi Mand xxx) nice senryu
i like the s alliteration (although i've been led to believe that alliteration has no place in japanese poetry - too bad if that's the case ços i like it :)
love judy
xxx
mand
10 years 7 months ago
Hi judyanne - :)
Seems we are both fans of this little gem!
raj
10 years 7 months ago
Hi Judyanne
Thanks for your time and comments which are always welcome. Good to know you liked this one.
much love and hope you are taking good care of yourself...
Rula
10 years 7 months ago
Me too
I like this little piece dear raj.
I thought you need a space in the title between "a" and "Thought"
raj
10 years 7 months ago
Thanks Rula for your
Thanks Rula for your encouraging comment.
I must say you have a hawk's vision lol.....i have made the correction in the title..
Regards,