Fairy Tale Mish Mash (Humor WS)

but not a prosodic value in sight! Take out the line breaks and it is prose, pure and simple. Something like this should surely rhyme and have a strong meter.

This needs the workshop title in the heading so we can find it easier.
I think I may write another of these they are fun.
This is good and we nearly wrote about all the same characters lol, I will wait for the comments on the others and mine first.
I read Jesses comment and as you can see edited it this morning before going to press lol.
Take care young one and well done,
Yours, Ian.

It doesn't have to rhyme....

But Jess also has a point as your write has turned out more prose than poem...
It's hard to write poetry in story form
I think this is more what Jess means when he suggests to try rhyme....

i think if you work more on the rhythm and meter, giving it a form, then rhyme will become less necessary.

i enjoyed the mishmash
love judy
xxx

But i find rhyme doesn't work for me without good meter
And some of your verses (lines, that is) are still a little to long in comparison to others..

I wouldn't worry too much about it though - not sure where Chrys is heading with this, but I'm sure the poetry doesn't have to be perfect - i think the aim is to show humour in silliness

Love judy
xxx

no I said it did not have to rhyme I mainly was after the humor, and had stated so much
poor wolf lol nice work

i am probably the most notorious for writing prose instead of poetry around these parts, and there is no shame in it! i will say, however, that you are riding the line between the two here. my personal thought would be to stick to one or the other, but again, just my thought. i enjoyed the comedy here, and the story. nice write.

mag

Too much prose and not enough poesy.
Now the story is a hoot.

lol
which ever you prefer
it is the humor I was looking for
and so far I have not been disappointed

those that have posted already do what you feel comfortable with as far as which to use

This needs the heading to depict the place it should be, such as "the humour workshop"
I have found a gold mine at:-
http://www.fairytales.biz/list.html
Have a look and it's full of children's stories or the ones we loved when a child.
Take care and I hope you are resting, Yours Ian.xx

Double to triple posts.

Whether prose or poetry, I liked it. the humor is enjoyable to read. Mine may also get caught up in the prose or poetry controversey lol. I write more prose naturally as poetry is more challenging. These WSs is training me effectively. The moment I'm not thinking poetry, good grammar and spelling falls to the wayside): Your poem has given me an idea on how to write my fairytale(:

Well I guess I'm beyond being fashionably late getting here. I can blame it on you Not having humor shop in your title though lol. I see you have already addressed most of the comments so I guess all that's left is to say that you brought a smile to my face on this cold winter day.....stan

He he - you have an honest, open hearted sense of humour - made me laugh! it was good fun

Loved the imagery of this one:

Red and Bo looked at the wolf and than at each other with a grin.
They raised up their skirts to show off their combat boots,
Blasting Red's favorite music once again.
Circling the wolf, they tossed him about.
Moshing from side to side.

He he

Great poem - lifted my spirits

Love Mand xxxx

for posting on this thread when I have not joined the workshop.
It is fascinating. May I join now?

Looking forward

Grade A for humor for this.Here's a try for me.

Rapunzel kicks out the prince
for pulling off her hair
snow white starts to wince
seeing a bald patch there
the gingerbread man laugh
Till his belly cracked
three billy goats smilled
enjoying a snack
Aladdin rubs his magic lamp
and his genie appear
return rapunzel her old glam
I want her as my lover
in the blink of an eye
the bald patch is gone
but poor alladdin
he has much to mourn
for she chose his genie
instead of him.

Alid