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Jan 10, 2015
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The Promise
Pain grips my body,
forcing me to face
my own mortality
i will conquer it
until its sting fades
and I can rise again
Until then,
wait for me, dear friends
for I will return to you,
once again.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Comments
judyanne
10 years 6 months ago
khalid
A succinct and carefully worded write that gets to the heart of things
I hope this doesn't mean that all is not well
Thinking of you
Love judy
xxx
alidzain
10 years 6 months ago
Hi Judy
I'm recovering from surgery, dear. They've put the heart pacer to steady my heartbeat and now they need to see if its compatible. Still hurts sometime. Thanks for the kind words. Glad that you liked it.
Alid