The Mind Is Free

A man's body shackled by sickness,
lying on the bed, weakened
but his mind can still be free
to dance in his fantasy,
to fly with the mighty eagles
looking at the world from above,
to explore the wonders of space
witness the birth of a planet
or to journey to the past
reviving the good times shared
with loving family and friends

The body may be imprisoned
but the mind is free

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

Comments

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

Wonderful

I like everything about this.

A typo "explore"
And you need to space between "witness the".

Hope you'd have a quick recovery.

alidzain

10 years 5 months ago

Salam, Rula

Thanks for the visit and pointing out the mistakes. The pain can be very distracting.

Alid

mand

10 years 5 months ago

Hi Alid

So true! The mind can leave the body behind and journey to wherever it wants - television has helped, opening up the imagination to new and interesting things.

Good one!

Love Mand xxxx

I hope you're feeling o.k today - not in to much pain. :(

alidzain

10 years 5 months ago

Hi Mand

thanks for the visit and comments.

Alid

alidzain

10 years 5 months ago

Well, Enos

this is what I am currently feeling as I am recovering from a surgery, so I supposed writing from real experience made it more heartfelt in its execution. Thanks for the visit and comments.

Alid