Victorclaude

Nov 05, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

you, the blank page

I have seen you before.
you are the taunt to my titillation

never-ending white

I shall cover you with scrawl
until you are covered --

some of it may even be good
scrawl

underneath it all, you are still
blemishless

you, the blank page --
I do love you so

never do you complain --
even when I am vile

at anything I say
you never blink your albino eyes

quintessence of patience
you are

to be so kind to one
so unworthy of your pureness

you, the blank page

I have just done it
again

vcp

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Country/Region: USA

Favorite Poets: Wallace Stevens, D. H. Lawrence, Charles Bukowski, Bob Dylan, Leonard Cohen, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Percy Bysshe Shelley, T. S. Eliot, E. E. Cummings, Emily Dickinson, William Butler Yeats, Pablo Neruda, Joni Mitchell, William Shakespeare, Basho, Elizabeth Barrett Browning, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Kelly Marie Hayner, Susan Wydville. D. Phillip Caron, Elizabeth Bishop.

Comments

Geezer

14 years 8 months ago

blank page...

Nice work Vic, but here is a thought or two. i try never to use the same words in the same poem, twice.
Let alone, within the same lines, or ajacent to them, unless it has special meaning. You did that with: scrawl, and covered. Try using some other words that mean the same thing. I thought the theme was great, and hope that you take the time to smooth it out. ~ Geezer

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Geezer,

I appreciate your comments, but this is the way I wrote this poem, and I put those words in their places on purpose, and they shall remain.

Thank you so much for stopping by.

Victor

judyanne

14 years 8 months ago

you have done it again

another great write victor - thoughoughly enjoyed it. but that's what i now expect when i come to your place...

one tiny thing...
- you have used 'cover' and 'covered' close....
maybe 'paint' or 'coat'
or since you then say
'underneath it all, you are still
blemishless'
perhaps 'camouflage', 'conceal'

sorry, don't mean to be always nit-picking
(but you've done the same thing with 'scrawl')
only picky 'cos i like it so much...

love judy
xxxx

judyanne

14 years 8 months ago

sorry

gee got in before me
i must've been fiddling with my comment at the same time he posted his
didn't mean to double up on the crit...
xxxx

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

No worries, Judy.

Love,

Victor

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Judy, my dear . . .

I like the way it reads the way it is written. Please refer to my response to Geezer.

Thank you for your continued support; it is much appreciated.

Victor

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Jayne, my dear friend,

Thank you so much~!~ and when will we get to see the text of which you spoke that required an ending that you now possess?

I am always honoured that you stop to read my falderal, Jayne.

Love to you, dear lady.

Victor

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

I'll go and look now. V

I'll go and look now.

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Rosina,

Although I have never cursed the blank page, and often its void white brings laughter sitting there so pure in its innocence until it is overwritten, that it cannot be blamed for "pent up emotions", but it certainly becomes a cathartic for easing emotion's pain as they are shared with the page. Gotta get 'em out some way, and how better than writing; it is a non-violent sport.

Thank you very much for the read and elucidating comment.

Ciao,

Victor

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Shirley,

"wonderful way of having a relationship with blank pages and poetry! " I would put this poem in the category of works written by a lunatic. For who actually speaks to inanimate objects such as sheets of paper, but poets, and yours truly in particular. Of course, lunacy is a relative concept, being one of those wonderful things known as an abstract noun, so I am in good company with abstraction.

Thank you, once again, dear.

Ciao,

Victor

scribbler

14 years 8 months ago

blank

How good to read a poem on writing that doesn't deal with writer's block. I guess I'll take this as a challenge to approach a similar write lol. I think the scrawl repetition works well although to repeat a word so close together usually doesn't............scribbler

Victorclaude

14 years 8 months ago

Scribbler,

I think the scrawl repetition works well, too. I can't wait to see what you come up with about writing!

Thanks for the read and comment.

Victor