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Jan 29, 2015
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of reality Kind edit
'''was'''... means gone----
''let old bitters be washed away----- and honey across memory ....do spray
Pragmatic ::::::no Posthumously
Very pragmatic view
that's why
Nobel is given to those living
and
those since had gone....
need no Posthumous
they need only to be remembered
even that they will know not
brains have been left in ashes
of that is there still
in any minds
a lingering doubt?
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
judyanne
10 years 4 months ago
well
I never knew that
But I checked, and I see that it is true
Good subject, loved - but you need to loose some waffle
love judy
xxx
lovedly
10 years 4 months ago
A dogs tail can never be straightened
so how can I lose my ability to
W A F F L E
do advise
no matter how much
LOVED tries
judyanne
10 years 4 months ago
imo
the poem starts at 'nobel given to those living'
and I would lose the caps, as well as the last line
but remember - this is IMO
ok ?
xxx
Sparrow
10 years 4 months ago
Loved
One of your complex riddles again, always remember that "Now" is but a thought before "Was"
I wonder if there is a barrier there like the sound barrier, and that it is our awareness that keeps us locked in the "Now.
Good write I wont bother about the Nobel it is a fictitious thing to many of us, lol
Yours Ian..
lovedly
10 years 4 months ago
Ian you re read again
Then when I am freer
shall amend
and u will then say
AMEN
Sparrow
10 years 4 months ago
Loved
Judy has given you very good advice, any more would not be useful,
Yours Ian..