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This poem is part of the contest:

February 2015 contest

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Step Out The Door (Feb. Contest)

Step out the door to clear the doubt.
You'll learn for sure what life's about.
What's good, what's bad you shall explore,
to clear the doubt, step out the door.

Unlatch the lock, lash out the fear.
find out your way through hope and cheer.
The journey is a joyful walk,
Lash out the fear, unlatch the lock.

Knock hard to learn what, where and why.
Detect the world with naked eye.
It doesn't lie, but helps you gain.
What, where and why, knock hard to learn.

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About This Poem

Last Few Words: "Gaining Knowledge" is an alternative title. I thought this might work better for the contest.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

Sparrow

Sparrow

10 years 5 months ago

Rula

Excellent write, all these doors and not one love story yet lol,
Take care Young Lady, Yours Ian..

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

Ian :)

Thanks for the lovely comment.

Sparrow

Sparrow

10 years 5 months ago

Good Morning

Have a lovely day out there and may you not have to seek those things you need.
Want for nothing,
Yours Ian

judyanne

judyanne

10 years 5 months ago

great write Rula

I love the way you have worked the first and last verses of each stanza
and nice blank verse iambic tetrameter
best of luck in the contest
love judy
xxx

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

Judy

Many thanks.
Wish you the same dear.

mand

mand

10 years 5 months ago

Rula

Yes I agree with above comments - looks like the prize is going to be split at least three ways! :)

love Mand xxx

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

hello Mand

Appreciate your visit dear!
It's fun what counts, isn't it?

mand

mand

10 years 5 months ago

:)

Absolutely!

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 5 months ago

Salam, Rula

I might be wrong but it seems like you are trying to rhyme it, if so, then that last stanza's last 2 lines' ending words are off - "gain" and "learn"

Alid

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

may be

near rhyme. Fortunately it isn't a sonnet after all.

R

raj

10 years 5 months ago

ummmm

I remember having posted a comment on this...dunno where and how it disappeared...anyways it was appreciative...making you a strong contender to win the contest...

Regards,

Rula

Rula

10 years 5 months ago

No problem raj

You indeed left a comment under the main thread, Feb. Contest blog.
Thanks for the supportive comment.

S

scribbler

10 years 5 months ago

Hey Rula

All the contestants seem bent on making judge's job harder and this is no exception......stan

Esker

Esker

8 years 4 months ago

cheer from the sturm

this shines
im basking in it
food bank a man
cursed...'fucking asshole'
wondered if it was I
so I lumbered over to him
he seemed to want to in
a hurry to hop on his electric
three wheeled car...those things
people need when their legs
are done...lungs shot..legs bad
asked him how many batteries
they take..
'many' he mumbled
flipping the lid like he was
working on something
'i have a large hammer...wrench'
which i do..my pedal falls off
stripped nut on bike...
still fumbling...it was the seat
adjustment...
maybe he was cursing the seat
but then a key fell from the latch
aside where he parks his butt
'why thats the key i was looking
for for over a week' suddenly
joy lit his eyes...
'he looked at me'
'it was meant to be'
thank u..he said
but i know he was talking
to the luck

attitude changes everything
but it came from the heart
not the head
nor hands...

a great day..like this poem
beautiful and striking
like sunshine
on a stormy day!

thank U Rula!

W

Rula

Rula

6 years 5 months ago

Mark

Really happy with your passing by.
Thank you

Eumolpus

Eumolpus

6 years 5 months ago

a poem from 4 years ago!

and the comments are such a nice remembrance of Esker.

The message is clear and well presented.

I would just suggest as you have 12 lines in sonnet form, why not add a rhymed couplet to make it a sonnet? The form is most inviting, and I think the poem could use the resolution and vague poetic truth the last lines of a sonnet usually offer. Just a thought.