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Jan 17, 2011
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Bollocks to Piaf
Fuck all those sappy ballads,
and all those shitty torch songs.
wish with all my heart, I hadn’t lost you.
Show me the lyricist,
and I’ll strangle them.
Want to stuff every note
down their gullet.
Love is not the greatest thing,
It’s hell, when your broken hearted.
And yet when I’m lonely ,
I’m forced to listen to the great Miss Cline.
I have to admit Roy Orbison still tears me apart.
Bollocks to Piaf
I have many, many regrets.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
raj
14 years 6 months ago
Dear Lou...
the idiosyncracy during catharsis is expressed so very well in this write..
warmly..
lou
14 years 6 months ago
Raj
thank you
lou
Geezer
14 years 6 months ago
I think...
you stuffed it down their gullets for sure with this one Lou.
Wish there was a magic potion to cure anyone of love, when they are on the wrong side of it. I'd send you some for sure. Anyone who has ever loved in vain, will see themselves here. Love ya, ~ Gee
lou
14 years 6 months ago
To you both
a big thank you
love lou
Rottiestyl
14 years 6 months ago
Talk about passion. I have to
Talk about passion. I have to agree enjoyed the fact that sometimes the music hurts more than the act itself. Great gutsy write.
Hooded Stranger
14 years 6 months ago
Lou
Lou,
great title - it lets you know what to expect before you read on!
This is hilarious!
Glad you didn't want to strangle the lyricist from Systema Synthetica as well!
HS
lou
14 years 6 months ago
HS
HS,
I'm really pleased that you like the poem.
I wouldn't dream of strangling the lyricist of Systema Synthetica, I hear he is quite good lol!!
Lou
Orphani
14 years 6 months ago
"some sad things in there"
"some sad things in there" said Barry... I say this is one of your very best if not the best.
~A &B
I don't know if you need both first & last name for folks to make the association between lonely and Roy Orbison. Who is on the top ten in my book. ~A
Kailashana2
14 years 6 months ago
Second thoughts this morning.
Second thoughts this morning... it is perfect as it is,
~A
lou
14 years 6 months ago
Anna
thank you
lou
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 6 months ago
lou
you did not play around with this one, you just let it all hangout. you attacked one of the main sources of love songs right at the title, yes I know this feeling of wanting to ripe your own heart out. this is where we become strong, after a great blow to our heart.
Great write lou!!
Eddie C.
lou
14 years 6 months ago
Eddie
thank you
lou
pleiades
14 years 5 months ago
fantabulous!
fantabulous!
(as seren will tell you, that's high praise from me)
biting, funny, bitter ...the three words that
immediately spring to my mind ... yet by no means is that
all this poem is
it reads as if it just sprang from your pen (spleen?)
in an outburst, yet it is so well constructed that i'm guessing
a level of thought had to go into it
as a huge piaf fan (and patsy and roy) the title
immediately grabbed me ...terrific title btw ...
i'm so glad i came across this gem of a write
i shall be reading more
cheers
p
lou
14 years 5 months ago
hi
Thank you very much, I love a Patsy Cline or a Roy Orbison song, because their songs are filled with emotion.
My idea was to express how you might feel if you had couldnt stand anymore pain
Lou
Psyve
14 years 5 months ago
Lou
There is a desparate heartache that shows in this write.
Very nicely done.
(I hope in time you will forgive me for being of the... unmentionable... ilk, myself.)
:-)
Psyve
lou
14 years 5 months ago
Psyve
Your Forgiven lol
Thank you
Lou