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Feb 16, 2015
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The Doors Of My Mind February contest
One, two, three and four.
Look at all the doors!
Some hanging from the ceiling,
some screwed onto the floor.
Swinging open and shut,
like a two by four.
Which one shall I choose,
memories of the past?
Tearing open old wounds,
reminiscing about love
that didn't last?
Cut off by the slamming of the door!
What about the one
filled with things that
need to be forgotten?
Too many emotions,
not hardly for the downtrodden.
Would someone shut that door?!
Swirling, twirling, whirling,
buzzing in my brain.
Feelings much too hard to explain.
Open and shut, open and shut
slamming, slamming, SLAMMING!
Would someone shut those damn doors!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Sparrow
10 years 4 months ago
Carrie
A journey into those things you don't need anymore, a grand write now the door to open is the one of Pride and future seen you cannot run through this one , it has to be opened with care and entered with a love of all things.
Where new memories can be made and a future looked forward to..
Great write now go through the door, Yours Ian with thoughts of Nevermore, xx
judyanne
10 years 4 months ago
Carrie
Did I not comment on this?
I thought I had - sorry
Lol - this reminded me of Alice...
I really like it
- especially the last two lines
Best of luck in the contest
Love judy
xxx
lonlyhrtsclub13
10 years 4 months ago
Judy
Thank you! It was a little "Through the Looking Glass" spin. I draw my inspiration from such tales at times. I also was thinking of the Doors of Perception by Herman Melville. The inspiration for Jim Morrison's Doors.
Sparrow
10 years 4 months ago
Carrie
was it you that asked to see the poster of "Jim Morrison" well I took a pic of it and put it on my profile hope you like it, Yours Ian xx
lonlyhrtsclub13
10 years 4 months ago
It was me
that asked to see the poster of Jim Morrison. It is fantastic!!!! I have a giant framed photo of him that the artist used psychedelic colors to manipulate the original one. It is under my bed at my parents house as no one in my apartment will allow me to hang it up there and I don't think my boss will allow it. I can have artwork just not a half naked Morrison :)
Sparrow
10 years 4 months ago
Carrie
when you have a place for this one I will send it to you, mind you it is big at 24 inches by 36 inches.
It doesn't eat or drink so costs nothing to keep lol.
Take care young Lady,
Yours, Ian
lonlyhrtsclub13
10 years 4 months ago
I would
Love it. I will let you know. We may be moving into a larger apartment so I might be able to hang it up in a spare room.
scribbler
10 years 4 months ago
hi carrie
if this is meant for contest please edit title by putting (Feb. contest) next to it