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Jan 18, 2011
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Eyes Reviewd
Eyes
You clear my fundamental
About eyes,
I thought my eyes
Were the most beautiful
Till I saw yours
Your eyes are
Much more wonderful
My eyes even today
Are stared at by
Guys,gals and gays
Haggard men and bent women
Also look into them
What they adore
I’d love to know more
But friend
You must close your eyes,
As they'll love yours
Much more
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
loved
14 years 6 months ago
Yeah
on the other site
a lovely eyed girl ....wrote on eyes
this was as my answer..COMMENT.. to her
scribbler
14 years 6 months ago
OK
The 1st part was a well written easily understood comment on being overcome by another's eyes.I have no idea what you are referring to in second part lol. I guess I'll need to come back and read it again with a different state of mind ...................scribbleer
loved
14 years 6 months ago
The second part
A guy is publishing
all about females and males genital organs
appears to be a size cum sex maniac
and at times toooooooooooo correct
Now you may decipher with ease
please
scribbler
14 years 6 months ago
hello
Maybe not abandon second part but expand on it and make it a separate poem ?...............stan DAMN! shirl the pearl beat me to it lol
loved
14 years 5 months ago
Thanks STAN
THe second part i think has gone into garbage
shall retrieve if possible
from the clergy
the garbage
authority
loved
14 years 6 months ago
OK
MAM DUNNNEDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDEEEDDDDD
loved
14 years 5 months ago
GLAD U LIKED MY EYES
And I'm sure others shall too
thanks Shirley where were uuuuuuuuuuuuuu
Didn\t see uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
YESTERDAY