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Mar 29, 2015
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THE ROLLING CREST
Now...
where I sit and recall
the times passed
music, loved ones....all
But
it's also where I dream
of things yet to come
plans and hopes
the future
So here I am
in a never ending tension
being pulled forward and back
Ever riding the crest of Now's wave
as it rolls across
the ocean of time
And as years goes their ceaseless way
they change
just like me
as I surf onward in
the now.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Realized it had been a while since posting a free verse. And I'm not fond of using a line within a poem for title, so I'm open to suggestions
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
10 years 3 months ago
Nothing wrong with using a line within for a title,
beats the shit out of untitled.
Some suggestion-
Wave of Now
A Present
The Present.
Fine freeform, I liked it. If you don't use 'present' in the title I would change one of the 'now's to present, one too many repetitions in my view.
scribbler
10 years 3 months ago
Hi Jess
i reckon you know I'm a bit different from a lot of people about my writing lol. Thanks for both your time and title ideas. Hmmmm.........somebody should host a shop about titles lmao. I'll gather a few more suggestions then make a title decision. I'll ale see about there being too many "nows".......stan
raj
10 years 3 months ago
Stan
How about
At the cross roads
No Man's Land
Timed Out
Stop Watch
Static
scribbler
10 years 3 months ago
raj
All good suggestions. Even if I don't use one of them or even any others suggested these ideas will at the minimum give me different avenues of thought to explore......stan