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Apr 08, 2015
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Poetic Resume
Poetic Resume
To pen the pain a heart has known,
the anger of a soul,
are things a poet does without regret
no matter where one’s thoughts are blown
or how one plays the role,
a bard’s resolve is often hard beset
to conjure up in imagery
the texture of a man,
or choose a perfect metaphor for lust,
one first must conquer bigotry
which seeks to foil the plan,
and grind it into existential dust
the colors of an autumn leaf,
the music of a stream,
how the setting sun defines the sky
explaining love beyond belief,
the fantasies of dream,
are things you do and never question why
defining what we see as real,
and showing that it’s not,
making simple mortals comprehend
the anguish that the gods conceal
when prayers are lost in thought,
this is what the poet must defend
to save us from complacency,
and demons of despair,
a bard must first obliterate his own
the fabric of transparency,
is torn beyond repair
when verses make the truth forever known
C. Lon R. Bruso
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I got bored and wrote this, perhaps I should have stayed bored???????
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
raj
10 years 3 months ago
Hi Lonnie
In my opinion you did right by writing this. Being in the editing stage I am sure you will be working on this to bring it to your own expectations and I know you set pretty high standards for that...i really liked the them and message..
Regards,
Lonnie
10 years 3 months ago
Thanks raj,
Your kindness in taking time to read and leave feedback on this is greatly appreciated!
weirdelf
10 years 3 months ago
Oh Lonnie!
You never, well rarely, disappoint.
You know I never flatter, I don't have the gene, but this has the voice of the Bard.
You have conquered the negativity of your more recent poems and created an uplifting and inspiring piece.
Kudos.
Absolutely no crit.
Lonnie
10 years 3 months ago
Thank you most kindly,
It isn't easy conquering one's negativity about old age and coming up with something worthwhile. But, I try, and I appreciate you noticing!
weirdelf
10 years 3 months ago
I quote from a comment I made in the Critique workshop
"It is the purpose of Neopoet
We do not publish, we are a workshop. "Critique don't comment".
We are a community of poets here to help each other, not a social club of mutual masturbators.
Critique is the very basis of this.
One aspect I have changed is with respect to two poets, Esker and Lonnie, who teach by the very substance of their poems. I have often criticised them for not giving substantial critique yet they teach by their work. I apologise to them and now appreciate them, they are substantially different yet both brilliant, major poets in their very different ways and I appreciate them both."
scribbler
10 years 3 months ago
Hi Lonnie
You hardly need a resume as far as I'm concerned. I reckon you've notice over time that I seldom leave any suggestions for change for you to think about. I also suspect you know why.......any suggested changes would only make a poem different in your case and not make it better.
i agree with this poem's premise that a good poet writes of both the good and bad in life. Good to see you..........stan BTW loved the rhyme pattern
Lonnie
10 years 3 months ago
Thanks Stan,
My poetic ego blesses you for your kind words! LOL!!
judyanne
10 years 3 months ago
great write Lonnie
I love it more, the more I read it
I especially like the last three verses
No suggestions to offer, and as Jess said, it is really good to see this other side of you :)
love judy
xxx
Lonnie
10 years 3 months ago
Thank you Judy,
I do have to be careful showing my "Other Side" though, as sometimes it makes me seem scitzophrenic! LOL!! ( spelling )???