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Jan 20, 2011
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Just For Tonight
Put on soft music, turn down the light
for we are together and alone tonight.
Close the curtains, unplug the phone
just for tonight, lets stay alone.
Come up close, so I can see
there in your eyes, your love for me.
Let my lips caress your face
while we share a warm embrace.
Kiss me tenderly the time is right
for we are together and alone tonight.
Take my hand and lead me to
where I can give my love to you.
Hold your body, close to mine
just for tonight let’s make the time.
Set the passion in you free
as you give your love to me.
Stay in my arms, all through the night
for we are together and alone tonight.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
14 years 5 months ago
I see...
the lyric influence very strongly here. Your rhyming is perfect, and I think that the only thing that this needs, is to have a chorus, music, and a good deep bass voice to sing it! I can almost hear someone like Jim Reeves singing something like this. Great work! ~ Geezer
Timbo
14 years 5 months ago
Thanks for a great comment,
Thanks for a great comment, don't suppose you can sing can you!?
take care,
Tim